I wanted to attempt a sonnet, just to say I did it. It was too poor to submit for an assignemnt, but can someone tell me I did it? or not. I just counted 10 claps for each line. Is that wrong? I didn't count any stressed or unstressed. Can it still work that way, I think it was easier. You can stress anywhere you want! As long as there are 10 claps, right? Or am I so wrong. I'm sonnet dumb!
Brown Hown
I’m writing a poem for my dear dog.
It’s no Shakespeare I’m only a novice.
I apologize if this is a fog.
My dog has passed and him I dearly miss.
He was my best friend this is very true.
We would run together on our dirt road.
He did come to campus and visit SLU.
Chasing squirrels was a funny of his modes.
Is it silly that my dog made me chuckle?
He knew me better than any one else.
When I would cry my tears he would snuggle.
I love him and I remember his smell.
You can all me crazy and call me wild.
s’ No other dog can make me smile.
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Just come across your page and though you're probably passed the point of being too bothered I thought I'd give you a wee answer.
ReplyDeleteThe sonnet isn't really as structured a form as it once was and there have been different types since its inception (shakespearean - Pretarchean etc) You've got it structured pretty solidly and it scans okay as rough iambic pentameter on the whole - so yeah nice work. However the really great thing about contemporary poetry is we've discarded the rigidity so where you have altered your sentence form for: "and him I dearly miss" to get the rhyme working you could have just left it at - and I dearly miss him - the assonance is still there and we're allowed to credit the reader with appreciating sentence structure rather than breaking up the natural sound and flow for the sake of a cheap rhyme.
There are so many contemporary poets from John Ashberry, Ed Hirsch, Oz Hardwick, Don Patterson who are hugely respected and their sonnets are only recognisable as sonnets because they (on the whole) adhere to two really basic rules: 14 lines and there is some kind of turn around the 8th line which starts bringing the poem to a close.
I stumbled across your blog accidentally this morning but will continue to read - well written and v engaging.
Hope this was of some help
best wishes
Steve